Without wishing to derail the thread further, I’ll just say again that context is lost in text. Please take that into consideration. He could definitely think his version is superior, and at the same time could also mean no offense to Noble because he appreciates the work done regardless.
If there’s anything more, we can continue in PMs. I hope you understand I’m just asking that you take a little more time to consider possible intent.
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This is exactly it. To a tee.
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I was hoping for some k-pop in her story due to her heritage. I mean she’d be listening to Girls Generations right about now.
Well, I would definitely be a hypocrite if I couldn’t take criticism. Look, you said I lack subtlety and table manners but I don’t feel the need to say anything less than what I absolutely feel. If I’m arrogant, if I’m a jerk that’s fine.
But yet, when I did say no offense you said that I shouldn’t backpedal. I should just say what I need to despite sounding like a jerk. So what would you have me do? be forward and say something and sound like a jerk or sugar coat it and try and be as respectful as possible. Because at this point I feel like you recommended both.
When I said no offense I just meant that I didn’t harbor any disrespect for Noble. The context of my post was not disrespectful by design. Other forum members have pointed this out. I still don’t harbor any disrespect for Noble.
Lastly, it feels like you didn’t expect me to stand by my piece at first but how can I not stand by it if I wrote it? I feel like what we have here is a big misunderstanding. But that doesn’t matter now.
This will be my last response on this thread. I don’t want to derail it anymore. If I have criticisms on the KI novela when the new chapter comes out I’ll just post a thread about it instead of derailing this one.
I know you won’t respond to this because you said yourself that you weren’t going to post here anymore either. But I really, really hope that I haven’t made you guys hate me for this. Truth be told, none of this was worth it. If I knew that I was going to be arguing about this for like, 2 hours I probably would have just kept my mouth shut.
You guys are a great group of people that I respect a lot and if there’s anything at all that you need to say to me based on the criticisms you see here just shoot me a PM.
Not one, but TWO Star Wars references FTW! And The Beatles to boot! Heck yeah! That being said, Punch Fighter must really be as dumb as it sounds, and the down-talk towards the twins’ chosen hobby must be a slap in the face to Maximilian and other Twitch streamers who read this - Kim is obviously not on their side. 
@RGLOfficial Don’t feel bad, you’re not the only one who’s ever unintentionally offended a dev/mod (been there, done that) - just be glad that time will pass and that they’re pretty rational when it comes to letting bygones be bygones. 
Just because she is Asian doesn’t necessarily mean she MUST be into that kind of stuff 
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Yep. Definitely losing it.
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I’m I the I’m the only one who read, "I got a freakin Dragon) a an allusion to Gargos past defeat to the Dragon warrior?
???
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Can’t wait for Sabrewulf to job it up in front of Thunder.
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Kim’s twin cousins helped run Uncle’s business, but they were complete tools and aspiring embezzlers, only concerned with their stupid Twitch stream for an idiotic fighting game called Punch Fighter.
I’d love to see that game. Maybe this dude is the secret boss…
One corner of the room was taken over by her cousins’ computer equipment: a PC and a Playstation and stacks of games and old consoles, controllers and headphones were strewn everywhere.
Well Hell has definitely froze over, Playstation is friggin’ mentioned in a friggin’ backstory for a friggin’ character in a friggin’ Xbox game…
Kim rolled her eyes, muttering “Have fun PewDiePie wannabees” under her breath.
WHAT!? HAHAHAHAHAHA!
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I just want to see what the war golem’s going to do.
You messed up by saying “My piece is FAR SUPERIOR!”…Uh no…it’s not. You may think so, and that’s fine…but its definitely not superior. Its just a retelling of something another person created. Its almost like your singing Karaoke and you changed the lyrics on the chorus. Like a cover band… a cover band or Karaoke singer is never SUPERIOR to the original creator.
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So you know how the patent for games on the loading screen ran out a while back? I think Noble should get some commission for stumbling on to a brilliant idea. (I don’t know whose input this part in the story was, but credit to them if it wasn’t Noble)
Think about it, chibi version of KI along the lines of Pocket Fighter. No need to be over-complicated, 4-button system, one special for punches or kicks, mash all 4 when opponent is in Danger to get a finisher. Just an idea I wanted to throw out there, though I kinda realize that there aren’t many places to fit that into this game.
On topic, nice chapter. Brings up a lot more questions, like how much does she know about Jago, was Hisako actually there or was that the Dragon Spirit showing her a sign, why would Hisako be there if she was and now that an ancient spirit has called him the “Watchman of the Gods” and told Kim to find him, is it plausible that Tusk’s gifts were given to him by a good guy instead of some sinister evil being.
Also I should leave a line appreciating the details of the environment, really helps visualize the scene better.
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Guess I have to break my own rule and continue this…
Let me be absolutely clear on what I believe both you and Adam are missing. I wrote the piece to demonstrate one of the ways the last line could have been written in a much smoother way. So in a way (Keep in mind everything I say here is opinion) I wrote it to be superior.
I guess I never explained why I feel a correction was needed. By changing a few lines of dialogue, I added something that I feel was rushed and disrespected in the chapter. (Opinions) This is character development. The last line of the story is not something someone in Kim Wu’s situation would say. It felt forced to me. Like a cheap plug to the game.
To understand all this you have to understand that writing is not just words on a page. It’s emotions, it’s characters communicating with both eachother and the reader. I changed ONE LINE and I feel like in that one line I was able to show something new. In my version, Kim Wu expresses nervousness and Yeo picks up on it and gives her a small push. But everyone is acting like I rewrote the whole ■■■■ novella. I changed a single line and suggested some strategies Noble could use to smoothen out his dialogue. For that, I’m arrogant and nasty apparently.
So yes, I believe my version is superior. Why? Not because I’m trying to be better then Noble. Not because I’m trying to show off my writing, no. But because if I did not have confidence in my writing, I wouldn’t have an argument here. Just calm down guys.
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Why do the story mentioned “PlayStation” ? Or “Playstaion and Pc” isn’t it supposed to mention “Xbox” in replace of them ?
Answer please
Because MS and IG probably don’t care about the “console war” that everyone seems to freak out about.
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Maybe because it was the console of choice for two 17 y/o selfish punks in the stroyline. Worrying about streaming the day of your father’s funeral is definitely douchebag material and I can see why the author wouldn’t want to associate the Xbox with that pairing.
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I hope what’s mentioned in the story stays like that and don’t turns in the reality
It’s because Street Fighter V is on PS4 and PC.
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